what do you think of my essay.as far as punctuation goes.any suggestions?
As far as the jealousy goes that is a partial reason why the world does hate us, but that is not the reason why we are in war. In other countries or allies etc.. they do not have what the United states do. The things that this country has and others don’t could be looked at wrong to other countries. For example here in the United States everything is big. We have wide streets, massive houses, estates are endless, and expansion unchecked and carefree. It is assumed that large houses are a result of a selfish and indulgent consumption of fuel. Europe is becoming very short of living space, so luxurious “waste” of space and short sightedness is assumed. One big example of other countries looking at us in a bad way is MTV Cribs. In this show they have some of the biggest houses on the earth. This gives of a bad reputation of the United States. Another thing people view us by is in the US pop culture. Gangster rap usually raps about cruel, sexual or racial things. When you visit other parts of the world you realize their music is much different and not so sinful. Schoolbooks, youth organizations, radio, movies, TV, newspapers, official holidays spread the vicious and preposterous lies about life in the United States. Declassified files in former Soviet Union show shows KGB and related organizations spent hundreds of millions of dollars to spread the same lies in the west hiring countless agents of disinformation to communicate that America is cruel, corrupt, racist, exploitative, militaristic, and religiously fanatical society whose very existence menaces “People’s Republics” everywhere. Our country is also known for corporal punishment, lack of health system, and illiteracy homeless demographics. Our rape crimes and violence crimes are the highest in the world. I wonder though why is it that we have the highest violence and crime rates? I believe that it cannot be because of the tv that we watch because, other countries watch some violent movies as well. Is it because of our freedom that we have? Do people take too much pride of our freedom and think they can do whatever they want? I don’t know if this is correct as well because we have a thing called jail in the United States. I could understand why others would see us as a out of control country at times, but I think they should actually see for them selves before making any complete thoughts.
The United States is however very successful. It is to be known in most cases that the most powerful or successful is to be most hated. This is out of jealousy. Other parts of the world tend to think we are very conceded of this fact. Yes we are the most powerful people in the world but others think that our government does some things that are pretty stupid. Other governments find things unacceptable such as our pollution, environment, and arms race. This is to be viewed as appalling, immature and short sided. One example of showing of how our government looks bad to others is an opinion poll I found while researching. The poll I found shows half the German population that was openly critical of United States leadership for a number of reasons. The reasons were, its failure to consult its allies as promised, refusal to sign up to joint action against global warming, and its protectionist stance on trade issues such as steel and agriculture. Most Americans do not know of such things. I did not know my self that our government refuses joint action on global warming. This however makes me upset because I strongly support global warming. Another thing I found while researching was a brief survey of why Americans think the world hates us. 26% had said it was because of our democracy and freedom. 22% said it was because of our support for Israel. 20% said it was our values and way of life. 17% said our influence on the economy and lives of Middle Eastern countries. 11% said our economic and military power. American hatred has increased over the last 15 years and our country has been playing the more destructive role in the world since the conclusion of the cold war.
i am doing this for a political science class
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This is a very moving research Paper, but first replying person didn’t see good punctuation anywhere because your first few sentences are poorly written. You, first impressions.
Why are we at war? Though the world is jealous of many of our wealthy citizens noting that the United States does not seem to have to answer to any power, and we flaunt and use our power to control world events without thought to the benefit of all humankind, some of the jealousy is misplaced.
The United States, as a country, did enjoy more freedom throughout it’s history than many other countries have, and it still does have some of the most expansive yards surrounding even a poor man’s humble dwelling, that is only one luxury. There are many other things that American poor actually do not have, that are in place in other countries.
So, why is America so despised? What are the things that bother other peoples of the Earth?
As for punctuation, please note that when you have a natural pause in speaking, you should have a period or comma. To end a sentence with a period, it should have a subject (doer) and a verb (actions) along with what is being done.
Words like that, and, or, and other linking words should have commas just before the special word that links them.
When a sentence doesn’t start with the subject, you should also have a comma in the middle where the main claus is identified by the second Subject and Verb. Words like When, If, and other such beginning words are a hint that you have such a two part claus sentence.
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